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3 Worst Places to Make a Grammar Error

August 29, 2017 by Barbara McNichol Leave a Comment

Grammar ErrorBy Kathleen Watson (used with permission)

News headlines draw us into a story. Report titles summarize what our readers can expect. Email subject lines should do both. That’s why these are the three worst places to make a grammar error.

Here are three headlines that don’t pass a grammar test and how they could be better:

  1. Bill Nye Only Needs 10 Seconds To Explain The Toughest Science Theories

The problem: misplaced modifier

Modifiers are words that add meaning or clarification. The emphasis of this headline is the minimal amount of time Science Guy Bill Nye needs to explain complex science theories.

Modifiers should be placed close to—preferably next to—the words they modify.

The solution:

Bill Nye Needs Only 10 Seconds To Explain The Toughest Science Theories

  1. France’s Political Parties Are Banding Together To Stop Le Pen

The problem: redundancy

Not all sources agree but I consider banding together redundant.

My test for redundancy: Would the opposite descriptor—in this case banding apart instead of banding together—make sense? Do people ever band apart?

Of course not. So there’s no need to clarify that people—or political parties—band together.

As a verb, band is described this way: to unite in a troop; to come together in a group because of a common purpose or belief

Synonyms are to connect, to join, to unite, to merge.

The solution:

France’s Political Parties Unite To Stop Le Pen

  1. Stabbing At Flint Airport Deemed Potential Act Of Terrorism By FBI

The problem: This wording could be interpreted as the FBI having committed a potential act of terrorism.

The solution:

FBI Deems Flint Airport Stabbing Potential Act of Terrorism

FBI Deems Stabbing At Flint Airport Potential Act of Terrorism

News cycles rapidly, and writers are under pressure to publish stories in minimal time. Yet when I read these headlines, it took me just seconds to recognize better ways to compose them without a grammar error.

Whether you’re reporting the news, writing a title for a report, or crafting an email subject line, allow time to review what you’ve written. You’ll be more likely to catch these kinds of oversights that avoid detection when you write in haste.

If you see silly or questionable headlines, please note them here or send them to mailto:contact@ruthlesseditor.com

Kathleen calls herself the Ruthless Editor. She has created Grammar for People Who Hate Rules to help people write and speak with authority and confidence. Kathleen can be reached at kathy@ruthlesseditor.com.

Filed Under: Grammar Tips Tagged With: better subject lines, better writing, grammar error, Kathleen Watson, nonfiction book editor, poor headlines, professional editing, Ruth Watson

How to Get Online Readers to Open Emails

November 20, 2016 by Barbara McNichol Leave a Comment

by Dawn Shuler (used with permission)

The Internet is a wonderful thing. It allows us to connect with people all over the world, get great information and resources, and do business. And in so many venues: social media, email, online communities…

But our inboxes fill up with email after email after email.

Typically, we open non-family emails (okay, maybe we automatically delete some family emails, too. I mean, how often can we really hear about Aunt Martha’s trials and tribulations with the neighborhood dog?) for two reasons: 1. We love the person and are avid followers or 2. The subject line is so compelling that we have to open.

Here’s a little test: which ones do you automatically delete? Why? Which ones do you automatically open? Why?

We’re talking about big-picture/long-term strategy vs. short-term tactics to employ right here right now.

First, big picture. To get people to love you and be avid followers requires work and commitment on your part. And it doesn’t happen in a day, unfortunately.

  • Give good content, over and over and over.
  • If you sell a service or product, make sure it’s something your tribe wants, not just because you can provide it.
  • Be authentic. Be who you really are, and the right people will respond to it. You don’t want the “wrong” people anyway, so don’t worry about repelling them. They’re not a good fit.

Along with your consistent work in strengthening your connection to your tribe, work on specific tactics. Create subject lines that will compel people to open your emails.

  • What subject lines appeal to YOU? Which emails from others do you open?
  • Track your results. Pay attention to your open rates.
  • Split test. Send the same email basically, but use two different subject lines. Which one gets more open rates?
  • Keep a file of subject lines that appeal to you, and use this list when you’re crafting your own emails.

A few subject lines that caught my eye recently – and why:

“Use this subtle tweak for 10 times better results.” The “better results” catches my eye. Who doesn’t want to see 10 times better results in her business? And she’s giving me an “easy” solution, a “subtle tweak.” I don’t have to work for hours and hours (according to this subject line) to get better results. Very similar to “Lose 10 pounds in a week!”

“Add skills like ‘Small Business’ to make your profile easier to find.” Again, easy and quick change with immediate results.

“49 promo ideas. simple, grand + the tried n’ true.” 49 ideas! Wow!! Lots of information, and, of course, gotta love simple as well as tried and true.

“50 Most Expensive Homes (And Who Lives In Them)” – From Washingtonian magazine. I was waiting in line at the grocery store, and I picked up this magazine three times. I wanted to see pictures, and I was mildly curious about who lived in these houses. (I didn’t end up buying the magazine because there weren’t enough pictures.)

What have we learned here? Simple and quick results are lovely words to my ears, at least. What appeals to you? What makes you stand up and take notice? More than likely, it’s very similar to what YOUR tribe will take notice of.

(Note: I really wanted to pull in the idea of “simple” and “quick results” in my own article title and subject line, but I couldn’t do it. Some of these ideas aren’t quick and take consistent use to see results. I’ve given you some ideas, and they may or may not be simple for you to implement.)

It’s a cross between being an authentic, purpose-driven business owner.

Dawn Shuler, Soulful Business Coach, works with female entrepreneurs to strategize goals to move their businesses forward; establish manageable, doable actions to reach those goals; and create powerful, authentic content that connects them to their tribe . . . almost always with a focus on systems to make life and business easier.  

What suggestion do you have for better email writing?

Filed Under: Business Writing Tagged With: better subject lines, business coach, craft emails, Dawn Shuler, give good content, nonfiction book editor, Online Readers, open emails, professional business book editing, soulful business coach, split test, subject lines, write better emails

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