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Plant Word Pictures in Their Minds

April 26, 2017 by Barbara McNichol Leave a Comment

by Dee Dukehart (used with permission)

Spring’s the time for planting, nourishing and growing, and not just plants and vegetables.

When you present your ideas, knowledge, directions, or how to’s, plant your points into the readers’ minds with word pictures, and continue to nourish the points along the way. When you want to grow their learning, their future, and their well-being, use action verbs and descriptive information.

Describe your points with action verbs: verbs you can “see”: e.g., produce, generate, write, sell, achieve, deliver, etc.  When possible, rid your spoken and written words of auxiliary verbs: e.g., is, was, has, had, have, etc. Use a strong, action verb in their place if you can.

Examples:

  • We had an increase in sales last quarter. OR Our sales increased by 14 percent last quarter.
  • It was a great day for our team. OR We signed three new contracts today!

Which one gets you to “see” the action? Of course the second sentence.

How to Plant Word Pictures

Meetings get bogged down in minutia: a “quick” meeting can sometimes lag into hours. Make your meetings and presentations memorable with points that are worthy of everyone’s time.  What seeds of information are you cultivating for them to reap personal and professional benefits?

What do you remember from last week’s meetings?  What do you remember from a sales call?  What do you remember from any training?  When you want listeners to remember your points, plant word pictures in their minds.

How? Rid your writing of vague expressions such as these:

1)      Better

2)     Satisfactory

3)     Understand

4)     Good

5)     Improves

6)     Soon

What pictures do you conjure up in your mind when you read those words? Can you “see” the concept of better? Understand? Soon? No. Information needs to show “color” like your garden, so nourish and feed it so you can “see” the knowledge blossom.

Consider These Variations

1)      Instead of “better” use a statistic. “Your production escalates by x percent within a year when you use these tools.”

2)     Your sales numbers were “satisfactory.”  Instead:  “Your sales numbers exceeded our goal by 65 widgets; let’s get to 100 by fourth quarter.”

3)     “Understand?”  Everyone understands differently.  Instead: “You will recognize/identify your new time management skills by the extra hour in your day.”

4)     “Improves.”  By how much?  By how many? By when? Instead: “Accomplish your goals in six fewer steps with this process.”

5)     “Soon.”  What date?  What time? What quarter? Instead: “Get your initial draft to me by the end of the week. We expect to see our new product on the shelves in 45 days.”

Strive to plant a picture in your readers’ minds, then nourish your points with review and repetition.  Your ideas, knowledge, products or services, and how-to’s will grow more fruit.

Here’s to your great harvest seasons of information.

Dee Dukehart is a marketing communications trainer who can be reached at 303-549-0045 or Dee@DeeDukehart.com

Filed Under: Business Writing Tagged With: active verbs, Dee Dukehart, improve writing, nonfiction book editor, plant word pictures, professional business book editing, word use

Essential Everyday Email Tools

February 9, 2017 by Barbara McNichol Leave a Comment

by Dee Dukehart (used by permission)

I continue to see emails, blogs, articles, and other documents written with little regard for the reader. This post gives you Seven tools to enhance your email writing, your messages, and your ideas.

  1. Always use a salutation: Dear, Greetings, Happy Monday, Hi; any one of these is the polite way to engage your reader. After several threads with internal  readers, yes, you can forget the formality and answer or reply with no salutation.
  1. Write a specific subject line: e.g.: “Next Thursday, 2/16/17, Marketing Committee Meeting” and not just “Meeting.” Then type in the specifics in the body.
  1. Use complete sentences. This is not a text message, nor a tweet; use subject, verb, object. It’s the professional way to write.
  1. Hook your readers with a compelling first sentence. Instead of: “I’m writing you to inform you about our new vacation policy.” (The reader knows you’re writing about this because it’s in the paragraph.) Recommended: “One more week! Your new vacation policy entitles you to one more week…!”
  1. Know your audience. Who are your readers? Internal? External? International? New to your industry? A combination? Do they have the same language, vocabulary and knowledge that you do?Never assume your readers understand your internal jargon or acronyms; write in simple and clear language.
  1. Use correct grammar, punctuation, and syntax. When you find yourself questioning the correct way to write or punctuate your sentence either ask the department grammarian – there’s usually one around – or look it up. You might need a refresher in the rules and it’s best to get it right the first time.
  1. Proofread. I know I’m guilty of pressing the “send” button only to find out that I’ve misspelled a word, left out a punctuation mark, or used a “you” instead of a “your,” etc. It’s embarrassing! It also makes your reader think you don’t care.

Take an extra minute or two to re-read what you’ve written.

Always write for the reader!

Dee Dukehart is a business writing trainer whose tag line is Designing and Building Clear, Crisp, Comprehensive Word Pictures. She can be contacted at Dee@DeeDukehart.com

What essential email tips would you add to Dee’s list? List them here.

Filed Under: Business Writing Tagged With: better writing for business, Dee Dukehart, essential business writing, essential e-mail writing, nonfiction book editor professionals, Sandbox Communications

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