Why do writing teachers suggest (beg, implore, cajole) that you use “active” verbs in your writing? Because they improve it (almost all of the time). Active verbs:
- Declare who or what is (or should be) performing the action; you avoid confusion, guesswork, or dodging responsibility.
- Make your sentences flow more easily; readers more quickly “get” the ideas you want to convey.
- Usually require fewer words in a sentence, so you’re whacking wordiness!
How to Identify “Passive”
As a reader, if you can’t identify the doer of the action—the subject—the sentence has likely been constructed in the passive voice. Even when the subject is clear, two clues help you identify “passive” use: 1) the word “by” and 2) variations of the verb “to be.”
Consider these sentences:
Passive—“The juicy watermelon was eaten by the boy.”
Active—“The boy chomped into the watermelon’s juicy belly.”
Passive—“Employees are seen by their managers as responsive and enthusiastic.”
Active—“Managers see their employees as responsive and enthusiastic.”
In addition, passive verbs can foster weasel-like communication. They might be used to hide who’s responsible for an action, thus evading accountability rather than declaring it. For example, if a contract states “the rules for the homeowners will be enforced” but doesn’t note who will enforce those rules, what’s the result? Ambiguity. Confusion. Inaction.
How to Identify “Active”
The pattern for an active sentence is typically “subject + verb + direct object.” The direct object is the recipient of the action—that is, what or whom the verb affects. Example: The employees (subject) implement (verb) the new strategy (object). Who’s doing the action of implementing the new strategy? The employees. Thus, it’s clear the employees are accountable for the action.
Notice the passive construction in the following sentence and rewrite it, making sure to use an active verb. (Hint: You need to make up a subject.)
Passive: This policy is being implemented in an effort to streamline our process.
Use the clues provided here to identify and passive sentences and revise them. That’s how you strengthen your writing every time.